How Dare You | WToA

Hi,

Great work on shading, lighting and setting the mood. The scene is very vivid and lively! It seems to be like a moment caught on camera and the brilliant character expressions shows us as the viewers that something is about to go down.

Here are a few suggestions for improvement:

• There are two areas in the anatomy of the red-and-white character (left) that could use some minor tweaking, but overall the anatomy is good. These areas are the visible paw and the jawline. The paw, from that angle, would probably be more turned out than facing forward, or perhaps have more refined toe lines (the detail is rather vague here). The jawline seems only slightly too forward. One other part of this character that I'm unsure of is the line that seems to suggest his stomach / chest area. This line makes the character seem far too slim to be carrying its own weight. It would make more sense to have the line much further down, hidden by the neck of the black-and-grey character.
• When it comes to the two characters interacting, it seems like the black-and-grey character is showing no interest in the other character - he (?) is looking out of frame and nothing in his pose suggests he is interacting with the other character, aside from his bared teeth. So my question is: are they communicating with each other or with someone outside of the screen? If they are interacting with each other, having them looking directly into each other's faces might have been a better approach. Even having the black-and-grey character's eyes looking in the direction of the other character would help already. I just feel like they don't interact enough for the title to make sense.
• I hope these suggestions are helpful!

Despite the suggestions, it is still fantastic work!  

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